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Phrases such as "Nowadays" and "Be that as it may" are colloquial and I would suggest using different phrases such as "Due to modern advancements in modern medicine" and "Even though there are treatments available" respectively. Also the sentence that begins with "Be that as it may" is a runon sentence and I would suggest splicing it to two different sentences. I would also suggest reading carefully through the entire page for simple words that are placed incorrectly, for example in the first paragraph,the third to last sentence contains the word "with" that does not make sense. I would also suggest to explain what the letters that are in figure 2 mean.
Phrases such as "Nowadays" and "Be that as it may" are colloquial and I would suggest using different phrases such as "Due to modern advancements in modern medicine" and "Even though there are treatments available" respectively. Also the sentence that begins with "Be that as it may" is a runon sentence and I would suggest splicing it to two different sentences. I would also suggest reading carefully through the entire page for simple words that are placed incorrectly, for example in the first paragraph,the third to last sentence contains the word "with" that does not make sense. I would also suggest to explain what the letters that are in figure 2 mean. Can also hyperlink your footnotes to the reference section with this code [[#References|[1]]] and simply replace the number at the end to match your references. Overall a very interesting page and I enjoyed learning about such a prevalent public health topic, along with such a historically relevant disease caused by a bacteria that we learned about.
-Blake Calcei

Revision as of 15:31, 29 April 2015

Phrases such as "Nowadays" and "Be that as it may" are colloquial and I would suggest using different phrases such as "Due to modern advancements in modern medicine" and "Even though there are treatments available" respectively. Also the sentence that begins with "Be that as it may" is a runon sentence and I would suggest splicing it to two different sentences. I would also suggest reading carefully through the entire page for simple words that are placed incorrectly, for example in the first paragraph,the third to last sentence contains the word "with" that does not make sense. I would also suggest to explain what the letters that are in figure 2 mean. Can also hyperlink your footnotes to the reference section with this code [1] and simply replace the number at the end to match your references. Overall a very interesting page and I enjoyed learning about such a prevalent public health topic, along with such a historically relevant disease caused by a bacteria that we learned about. -Blake Calcei