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Your paper is very interesting. Your introduction needs a bit of organization. Also you should put more information about the microbe. Also, when you talk about prevalence rising, you should probably put a graph showing that increase, if you have one. You should also say something about the prevalence of syphilis among different races since you have a graph there. I would like more information about syphilis too. You do a good job at explaining how to diagnose and treat but less job on the disease and the microbe. I would like the information about how the microbe becomes virulence at the cellular level, which mechanisms does the cell use to survive in the cell? Generally, Good job!

More comments: Your paper needs some spelling check especially the title of the sections. Work on grammar, some prepositions are missing. Work on making you paper flow. What os the mechanism of action of syphilis? How does it interact in the body, a section on this will make your paper more interesting. A concluding paragraph: what are the recent studies on syphilis?Any future studies? Any mutations observed?